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Hi! WIP is about a pair of teen chaotic neutrals finding their place in a broken world of late-late-late-stage capitalism, and perhaps even doing t...

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Hi! WIP is about a pair of teen chaotic neutrals finding their place in a broken world of late-late-late-stage capitalism, and perhaps even doing t...
Hello! My name is
Michelle
Young Adult
Horror Mystery/Crime/Detective Noir/Hard-Boiled Mystery Science Fiction Punks (Cyber, Steam, etc.)
Last Modified: Dec 16, 2019 @ 2:09 am
About Me

Hi! WIP is about a pair of teen chaotic neutrals finding their place in a broken world of late-late-late-stage capitalism, and perhaps even doing the right thing once or twice.

I’m currently working my way up to look for an agent, and I think I’m close enough to do that in 2020! Also, sometimes I write comics!

Love to Read

I love stories that skew towards the dark side and heavier topics, but that being said, I also HEAVILY appreciate lighter hearted work, which is equally important. Favourite genres include sci-fi, speculative, fantasy, horror, mystery and any combo thereof.

THINGS I LIKE

enemies to lovers (maybe back to enemies??), selfish characters, Romeo and Juliet type forbidden romances, grumpy girls, The Gays (TM), space, bad science, cults, AI, robots, de-colonization, rebels fighting for a better world/fighting fascism/fighting bigotry.

MG- Whichwood by Tahereh Mafi, Holly Black- Dollbones, Coraline by Neil Gaiman, I Was A Rat! by Phillip Pullman

YA- Scythe by Neal Shusterman, The Call by Peadar O Guilin, Wilder Girls by Rory Power, Coldest Girl In Coldtown by Holly Black, Warcross by Marie Lu, Rebel Seoul by Axie Oh…

NA- I recently read Ninth House and that was amazing, and really made me hungry for New Adult. If you’ve got something that’s pretty much NA, YES PLEASE.

Hard No's

I’m not super into contemporary fiction & romance if it’s primarily focused in reality. I don’t know what it is?? Lack of dragons?? Anyways, I’m really trying to give the genres a chance, but they’re not my go to for reading if they dont feature some spec elements.

Also no’s:

  • bigotry that isn’t unpacked
  • only character from a minority dies
  • stereotypes that aren’t turned on their heads
  • extreme, graphic violence on page 1
  • pro-Colonialism narratives
  • non #ownvoices

That’s all I can think of for now, but regardless, I’d appreciate some warning as to what to expect before getting into reading!

 

Experience
I've written a lot
Critique Styles
Back-and-forth Discussion
Blunt Truth
Editorial Letter
Sandwich Critique
Whole MS Reads
Critique Strengths
Big Picture
Characters
Dialogue
Plot
Worldbuilding
Time Commitment
Monthly, Intermittant (ie. when you have something to share)
Life Stages
Work Full-Time, Flexible Schedule
Preferred Contact Style
Email, Instant Messaging
Approximate Location
British Columbia
Around the Web
About the Work In Progress
Details About/Query First Page Other Projects
Working Title
Drained
Age Category
Young Adult
Genres
Horror, Mystery/Crime/Detective, Noir/Hard-Boiled Mystery, Science Fiction, Punks (Cyber, Steam, etc.)
Type of Project
Novel/Novella
Tags
Bi, chaotic gay, climate change, cyberpunk, LGBTQ+, lovers to enemies, mystery
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Back-and-forth Discussion
Blunt Truth
Editorial Letter
Sandwich Critique
Whole MS Reads
Big Picture
Description
Interiority
Pacing
Worldbuilding
About the WIP (Query)

Human blood powers everything in Red Deer, Canada, from lightbulbs to ATMs. It’s also where drainers—killers who steal their victim’s blood for profit—rule the streets after curfew.

Sixteen-year-old Jule Fowler, son of the inventors of blood power, will do anything—anything—to step out their shadows. But after getting caught with study drugs during senior finals, his reputation is obliterated, and no university will touch him. Sixteen-year-old Mousie Leadbitter, glamourous socialite, is the keeper of a little secret: her deliciously wealthy family runs an ATM empire that’s a front for a large-scale drainer operation.

When Mousie’s cousin gets kidnapped on his eighteenth birthday, her family refuses to pay his ransom. But with him gone, Mousie must take his place as figurehead of the empire and kill the blog. Desperate, Mousie makes Jule an offer he can’t refuse: help her find her cousin in seven days before he’s drained of all his blood, and she’ll use her connections to get Jule into any university he wants.

As the sleuths uncover more and more evidence however, they start to question everything they know about their families, Red Deer, and each other.

It’s a standalone novel with series potential that is Veronica Mars meets Black Mirror and will appeal to fans of Cindy Pon’s Want.

Content Warnings: addiction, drugs, alcohol, mild gore, mild sexual content (consensual), references to suicidal ideation and suicide, murder and attempted murder.

First Page

Thursday, 23:00,

Budget Manor, Blue District

The Mark 1 generator gurgled as I swapped out a sopping red filter, my brother’s cold blood pearling down my arm and into my sleeve. I gritted my teeth on the ridges of my multitool flashlight, blotted the stream in my jacket, and flipped the heavy on-switch.

With jolt and an irritated whirr, the 3D printer came back to life. Then the fluorescents flickered on, their cool light catching everything in the micro-apartment, from Serge’s crowded workstation to the cluster of fingerprints around the entrances to our capsules.

Beside me, Serge took a steady inhale on his e-cig, the veins in his arm bulging with the strain of the rubber tourniquet wrapped around it. He was leeching blood from a dart in his arm, his heart doing the heavy work pulsing it down a line of tubing and into the generator’s reservoir.

We were a little short on the utilities bill this month.

My brother shot a licorice plume towards the air vent and had the e-cig back in his pocket when he said: “You got blood all over your uniforms.”

I followed Serge’s gaze. At the bottom of our closet, wrapped around the Mark 1’s tripod legs, was a crumpled pile of my school clothes blossoming with stains.

“Well then it’s a good thing I’m suspended, isn’t it?” I snapped the generator panel shut. Even browned and faded, the words on the hazard sticker were clear: ‘DO NOT OPEN UNLESS AUTHORIZED LEADBITTER ELECTRICIAN’. I wasn’t; sue me.

Other Projects

More more more sci-fi. Maybe a retelling set in space?

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