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A California Missions Adventure!

January 3, 2020 No Comments

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A California Missions Adventure!
Hello! My name is
Andrew Eller
Middle Grade
Historical 1500-1800 1800-2000
Last Modified: Jan 3, 2020 @ 12:01 am
About Me

I have taught middle grades for 9 years.  I enjoy writing stories and poetry.  This project is my first time venturing into novel writing and was born out of my love for teaching and researching history.

Love to Read

I love fantasy, historical fiction, and middle grade novels (often realistic fiction).

Some fantasy series I adore are Stormlight Archives and Name of the Wind.

Some historical fiction novel I enjoyed were Pachinko, A Gentleman in Moscow, and News of the World.

Some middle grade novels I like best are Tiger Rising, Stone Fox, and The Remarkable Journey of Coyote Sunrise.

Hard No's

I can’t think of anything right now!

Experience
I'm very new to this
Critique Styles
Chapter-by-Chapter
Sandwich Critique
Track Changes in Document
Whole MS Reads
Critique Strengths
Characters
Plot
Worldbuilding
Time Commitment
2-3 Times a Week
Life Stages
Work Full-Time
Preferred Contact Style
Email
Approximate Location
Washington
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About the Work In Progress
Details About/Query First Page Other Projects
Working Title
El Camino
Age Category
Middle Grade
Genres
Historical, 1500-1800, 1800-2000
Type of Project
Novel/Novella
Tags
california, historical, missions
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Chapter-by-Chapter
Sandwich Critique
Track Changes in Document
Whole MS Reads
Big Picture
Characters
Dialogue
Pacing
About the WIP (Query)

Miguel is a young boy in colonial Mexico dreams of adventure and greatness.  Inspired by his reading and active imagination he hopes to bravely travel to far away lands like.  When the opportunity comes the adventures are bigger than he could have imagined, but so is his transformation.

First Page

Stained Glass Daydreams

 

Miguel shifted in the uncomfortable pew.  The long wooden benches stretched in ordered rows, all pointing towards the front, towards the priest and the golden altar behind him.  

It wasn’t that Miguel disliked going to mass.  Pillars and arches rose up around him, they seemed rooted and permanent.  The white walls were not only covered in designs etched in gold, but also with images of the saints.  It was these saints staring down from all directions that occupied his attention during the long services.  He knew the story of each, stories of adventure, bravery, and faith.  

The stain glass windows that surrounded the periphery of the sanctuary were colorful and bright, the light they allowed in fell tantalizingly on the neat rows of brown benches that served as pews.  The colors and images of daring acts in the service of God did not only contrast with furniture.

Today during a particularly lengthy liturgy, Miguel’s eyes fell on the altar of the Lady of Zapopan.  Of all the stories he loved hers best. He imagined riding alongside Nuño Beltrán de Guzmán, the great conquistador, as he valiantly fought to conquer the area for Spain and Christ.  That had been hundreds of years ago, of course, but for Miguel he dreamed of being able to bravely go in to wild land and explore where no explorer had gone before.  

When priests had brought a picture of the Virgin Mary to the final group of resisting Tzapopan warriors, Miguel imagined them bravely venturing into the hostile encampment, with a mass of menace and violence glaring at them.  He thought of them striding to the center, unconcerned with the danger and declaring that the Tzapopan people must seek peace and learn about God. In his mind it was at the moment when the savage crowd seemed ready to kill them that light had miraculously sprung from the picture of the virgen, striking awe into all who saw.  

Other Projects

I would love to write more novels like this in the future! Before this I wrote primarily poetry or examples stories to use in my classroom.

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