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PB about an unhappy clown who decides to run away from the circus

February 5, 2020 No Comments

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PB about an unhappy clown who decides to run away from the circus
Hello! My name is
Emma
Picture Book
Adventure Recent Past Magical Realism/Fabulism
Last Modified: Feb 10, 2021 @ 10:41 am
About Me

Hi,

I’m branching out from middle grade and having a go with a picture book. Outside of writing, I’m a UK to US transplant, military wife, mother of two crazies and caretaker to a ginger mouser.

Hobbies include – playing the violin very badly in a community orchestra, gardening, knitting, reading, and I recently joined a local women’s choir.

Love to Read

I like a strong, funny voice, and interesting twists on the familiar. Talking animals crop up a lot in my stories, but I also love to read a good murder mystery.

Hard No's

Thrillers and too much violence are a turn off for me – I like polite murders. Anything particularly religious is not my cup of tea, and I  tend to switch off if world building gets too intricate.

Experience
I've written some
Critique Styles
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Brainstorming/Plotting
Chapter-by-Chapter
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Critique Strengths
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Description
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Time Commitment
Weekly, Monthly, Intermittant (ie. when you have something to share)
Life Stages
Flexible Schedule, Parent (Older Kids)
Preferred Contact Style
Email
Approximate Location
Virginia
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Working Title
Bobo the Clown
Age Category
Picture Book
Genres
Adventure, Recent Past, Magical Realism/Fabulism
Type of Project
Picture Book
Tags
circus, Clown, Picture Book, running away
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Back-and-forth Discussion
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Description
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About the WIP (Query)

Bobo is a clown in the Toy Circus.

But he is tired of the noise and the cold custard.

When he decides to run away from the circus, he dreams of finding a wonderful family. But his new life turns out not to be everything he hopes it will be.

Bobo must find his way back home before the Circus leaves town.

First Page

Bobo the Clown decides to run away from the Toy Circus.

Every night, Bobo and his friends ride the Crazy Car around the circus ring. It’s exciting, but all the spinning makes Bobo feel sick.

One clown splats Bobo in the face with a messy cream pie. Another tips a bucket of cold custard over him. Bobo has had enough.

Tonight, Bobo peeks out from behind the curtains and watches as the crowds cheer. A girl in the front row laughs as the trapeze artist flies through the air above her. She grins sleepily when the acrobats do back flips across the floor. Her eyes shut as the tightrope walker climbs up the tower.

Bobo and the other clowns zoom into the circus ring. The girl is fast asleep on her mother’s lap.

As the Crazy Car speeds around the ring, Bobo wishes he could sleep too. But the circus is noisy, the custard is cold and there’s no lap for Bobo to sleep on.

“I’ll go and live with that girl’s family,” he decides.

He follows the girl and her mother to their car. Bobo sneaks in and plops down next to the girl.

“Where did that clown come from, Josie?” asks the mother.

“I have no idea,” says the girl. “But I really want to keep him. Can he stay?” Josie squeezes Bobo, and Bobo feels so loved.

 

Other Projects

I have a middle grade novel I am currently querying which is also on here – THE FLABBERGAST FARM FIGHTS BACK. I just finished a first draft of another middle grade novel – THE MUSIC AND MOUSE.  That one is going in the drawer for a couple of weeks.  I need to finish drafts of a couple of short stories I have started. Also have ideas for a couple of follow ups to the Farm story. And then there’s the middle grade Western ghost story I have ideas for……

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