Sapphic Hansel & Gretel Retelling. Magic, Monsters & a Cute Romance
After spending the last few years reading and reviewing hundreds of books on my blog, I’ve decided to share a story of my own. I have a bachelors degree in Psychology. I’m fully bilingual; english and french. I’ve written consistently for over 10 years, but this is my first attempt at a novel. I’ve done a bunch of writing craft research before starting my novel.
I’d like a critque partner who can chat back and forth a couple times a week as we swap chapters. In my time reviewing books I’ve spotted plot holes, pacing issues, character and world building inconsistencies. I can also do a good amount of line editing.
Thanks for stopping by potential critique partner. Id love to hear from you.
Some of my Favorite Books:
Honor Among Thieves by Rachel Caine
Gilded Wolves by Roshani Chokshi
Shadows Between Us by Tricia Levenseller
Warrior of the Wild by Tricia Levenseller
Rules For Vanishing by Kate Alice Marshall
The Kingdom by Jess Rothenberg
Lifelike by Jay Kristoff
Crown of Feathers by Nicki Pau Preto
Sawkill Girls by Claire Legrand
- Queer Characters
- Found Family & Familial Bonds
- Unlikely Friendships
- Ragtag Crew
- Morally Grey Characters
- Paranormal Creatures
- Animal Companions
- Futuristic Technology
- Creepy Island
- Dark Forest
I’m only interested in fantasy and science fiction as that’s what I have the most experience with.
An Own Voices Sapphic Retelling of Hansel and Gretel
What if Gretel fell in love with the witch only to find out her coven took Hansel and they have to team up to save him. A high stakes adventure love story with monsters and magic.
“What a terrible way to die,” the Commander says, staring down at the mauled body.
I shudder at the thought of breaking my spine and being forced to lay there, paralyzed while a horde of beasts fight for the chance to rip out my heart with their sharp claws. At least by that point I wouldn’t be alive to watch them tear into it with their needle pointed teeth.
The coppery scent of blood and feces assaults my nose as I step over entrails. The beasts tend to only go for the heart, but this poor man was clearly torn open during their fight for the organ.
I help a fellow guard carry the stiff body onto the wagon. We had to leave him out here until the beasts vanished into smoke with the rising sun. I have no idea why he thought it would be a good idea to sneak up on the wall and taunt the beasts below while intoxicated. I understand how the piercing howls could get on someone’s nerves, but there’s a reason why we only let guards up on the wall.
Angry drunks is one of the many reasons I prefer guarding the wall over shifts in town. I’d much rather deal with the hungry howls and incessant clawing, but I wouldn’t wish this fate onto anyone.
“Roll the wagon out of here before people start gathering. This is not how I wanted to start off the festival.” The Commander gestures at us to pull the wagon away.
So much for being off duty.
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- Offer to swap a small sample of your works, so you can see if you're really compatible. First chapters are a good starting place.
- If one party no longer wants to continue the interaction, it's nobody's fault. Sometimes finding the right CP takes time.
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