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Surfer Pirates And The Battle Of Tahiti. MG adventure, 67k words

February 10, 2019 No Comments

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Surfer Pirates And The Battle Of Tahiti. MG adventure, 67k words
Hello! My name is
Philip CK
Middle Grade
Action/Adventure Action Adventure Right Now Magical Realism/Fabulism
Last Modified: Feb 10, 2019 @ 4:54 pm
About Me

Hi!

I am writing for my children and because I think I ave a great story to tell. I love reading history, playing chess and running.

Love to Read

The most important thing is a good story, that connects well and includes a good amount of mystery and fantastic characters.

Hard No's

No adult fiction, please

Experience
I'm very new to this
Critique Styles
Back-and-forth Discussion
Brainstorming/Plotting
Chapter-by-Chapter
Positive Gushing
Critique Strengths
Big Picture
Characters
Dialogue
Plot
Time Commitment
2-3 Times a Week
Life Stages
Work Full-Time, Parent (Young Kids)
Preferred Contact Style
Email, Instant Messaging, Phone Call, SMS/Texting, Video Call
Approximate Location
Europe
Around the Web
About the Work In Progress
Details About/Query First Page
Working Title
Surfer Pirates And The Battle Of Tahiti
Age Category
Middle Grade
Genres
Action/Adventure, Action, Adventure, Right Now, Magical Realism/Fabulism
Type of Project
Novel/Novella
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Back-and-forth Discussion
Brainstorming/Plotting
Chapter-by-Chapter
Positive Gushing
Big Picture
Characters
Pacing
About the WIP (Query)

The book tells the story of Noa, a Tahitian fisherboy, who struggles to make ends meet after his dad disappeared in the sea. When the new fishing boats of an evil corporation put him out of business, he sells everything he’s got and enter the notorious Tahiti surfing event, the “most dangerous in the world championship”, in a make-or-break attempt for survival.

During the even, though, his village is destroyed by a mythical sea monster, which, together with four others, was sealed in a deep abyss aeons ago, after a battle of gods.

Billionaire Gordon Mann comes forth as the villain who unleashed and now controls the monsters, with help from Hephaestus, god of fire. Noa and three friends (India, Stella and Luke) discover that an old pirate ship, Nami, houses the temple of Aeolus, god of winds, and has special powers. Equipped with wind-god swords and newly bestowed abilities, the surfer pirates sail off to save the world.

 

First Page

Noa rides one more wave, all the way to the beach, and steps off his surfboard. This is his favourite time of the day, and not just because he can surf in solitude. It is when infinite shades of orange and gold burst across the horizon, accompanied by an eruption of birdsong, from the jungle. His mum says that Apollo himself orchestrates this symphony of lights, and Noa rarely misses it.

At thirteen, he is tall and athletic, so his dad’s old swimming shorts don’t look too big on him. He has short curly hair, flat nose and high cheekbones, and his wide smile supplements his intelligent, brown eyes. On his chest, rests a nautilus shell necklace, which was a gift from his mum. He recently acquired his first Polynesian tattoo, on his left shoulder, an elaborate design that includes ocean waves, shark teeth and sea turtles.

His rugged red van is waiting on the road, with his creaky canoe fastened on the roof, ready for their final trip to the market. Most kids in his community never continue past primary school, instead they start working, as farmers, builders or carpenters. After his dad disappeared, at sea, Noa took up fishing.

He secures his board next to the canoe, and drives off. On his right, the morning clouds, on top of the vivid green Tahitian mountains, start to disperse. He rests his arm on the open window, and the cool, soft breeze that comes from the ocean, ruffles his hair. Since last week, big swells have been arriving from the south, and the iconic wave of his village, Teahupo’o, booms like thunder. That break is the reason his beach is one of the hottest surfing spots in the world. And it is key to Noa’s impossible plan, which begins today.

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