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(WIP) Urban Fiction with strong language and violence

January 27, 2020 No Comments

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(WIP) Urban Fiction with strong language and violence
Hello! My name is
jstnlvrr
Young Adult
Contemporary Recent Past Literary Human Condition
Last Modified: Jan 27, 2020 @ 11:15 pm
About Me

I’m Jay, 28. I’m an artist (photographer/painter/drawer) and writer. I’m also a casual gamer.

This is my first manuscript and while I am enjoying writing it, my ideal writing genre is horror. Horror is my favorite media genre as I love horror movies, tv shows, true crime documentaries and the like.

I also like to learn new languages. I currently speak a little French and am learning Mandarin.

Love to Read

I love to read horror and thriller. Suspense and mystery/crime are also really interesting to me. Adventure stories that include magic elements are quite thrilling as well. As a member of the LGBT community, I also enjoy reading LGBT fiction.

Experience
I'm very new to this, I've written some
Critique Styles
Accountability Partner
Back-and-forth Discussion
Blunt Truth
Brainstorming/Plotting
Chapter-by-Chapter
Track Changes in Document
Whole MS Reads
Critique Strengths
Big Picture
Dialogue
Grammar
Pacing
Plot
Time Commitment
2-3 Times a Week
Life Stages
Student, Work Part-Time, Work Full-Time, Flexible Schedule
Preferred Contact Style
Email, SMS/Texting
Around the Web
About the Work In Progress
Details About/Query First Page Other Projects
Working Title
Becoming King
Age Category
Young Adult
Genres
Contemporary, Recent Past, Literary, Human Condition
Type of Project
Novel/Novella, Early Reader or Chapter Book
Tags
betrayal, death, drama, drugs, family drama, guns, tragedy, vengeful teenagers, violence
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Accountability Partner
Back-and-forth Discussion
Blunt Truth
Brainstorming/Plotting
Chapter-by-Chapter
Track Changes in Document
Big Picture
Characters
Dialogue
Grammar
Pacing
Plot
About the WIP (Query)

THERE IS STRONG LANGUAGE. THE CAST IS AFRICAN AMERICAN. THE STORY IS SET IN 1999.

The struggle to elevate ones life and gain power is hard enough, but when coupled with immaturity and jealousy, it can be devastating. Five teenage friends deal with the effects of their surroundings, in ways that lead to consequences that will change their lives forever. Fraught with secrets and lies, will they survive the test of life and actually make it to the top?

First Page

Stepping onto the covered pavilion, Carlos sat on the picnic table, feet planted firmly on the attached bench. Jeremy sat arms folded on the other end of the bench looking up at him. Todd leaned against a pole and giggled nervously, then Carlos shot him a dirty look. The tin roof over them tapped loudly from the falling rain. The sun was low in the sky, with twilight creeping in around them.

“So, what’s up nigga?” asked Todd, playing with the short dreads hanging in his face. 

“Y’all niggas the only people I can talk to, really. Todd, you dumb but I really fuck with you, you know that. Jeremy, I just met you, but you seem aiight.” He paused, then continued, after taking a deep breath. “Roy never liked me…And I’m sick of him being a asshole to me. I’m moving out. Tonight.” 

His pale brown skin turned a shade of red as he spoke, with veins protruding from his neck. Jeremy and Todd turned to face him, looks of uncertainty clouding their faces.

Todd snickered and slapped the pole beside him, “You ain’t got no job, Carlos. How the fuck you gone do that?” Hearing only his laughter he slowly stopped and quieted himself. “What?” 

Jeremy glared at Todd and Carlos closed his eyes, pinching the bridge of his nose with one hand. Carlos walked over to Todd and smacked the back of his head, sitting on the table top again. 

“What you mean he don’t like you?” asked Jeremy.

Other Projects

This is my first manuscript, however I do have another WIP that is just an idea as this point.

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