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YA fantasy - A deposed prince starts a revolution but things get complicated when he falls in love with the boy sent to spy on him.

January 31, 2020 No Comments

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YA fantasy - A deposed prince starts a revolution but things get complicated when he falls in love with the boy sent to spy on him.
Hello! My name is
Kate
Young Adult
Fantasy High Fantasy
Last Modified: Feb 19, 2021 @ 2:31 am
About Me

I’m an English teacher, introvert, and fantasy nerd. I’ve always loved to write but this is my first time writing a novel I’d like to publish. When I’m not teaching or writing, I can be found playing board games with friends or snuggling with my husband and cat.

Love to Read

I love a good fantasy (high or low) but I also enjoy sci fi, dystopian, and paranormal. I’m especially drawn to stories with diverse and LGBTQ characters. I like enemies to lovers and found family tropes, morally gray characters, medieval settings, witches, knights, mythology, and anything Arthurian or Celtic.

Some of my favorite books and series include Harry Potter, A Song of Ice and Fire, Of Fire and Stars, and The Dresden Files.

Hard No's

I’m not interested in reading contemporary that isn’t fantasy.

Experience
I've written some
Critique Styles
Chapter-by-Chapter
Line Edits
Sandwich Critique
Track Changes in Document
Critique Strengths
Big Picture
Characters
Description
Plot
Time Commitment
2-3 Times a Week, Weekly, Intermittant (ie. when you have something to share)
Life Stages
Work Full-Time
Preferred Contact Style
Email, Instant Messaging, SMS/Texting
Approximate Location
United States of America (USA)
Around the Web
About the Work In Progress
Details About/Query First Page
Working Title
Dantion Rising
Age Category
Young Adult
Genres
Fantasy, High Fantasy
Type of Project
Novel/Novella
Tags
enemies to lovers, espionage, found family, LGBTQ+, revolution, romantic fantasy, royalty
Seeking Critique Styles & Strengths
Chapter-by-Chapter
Line Edits
Sandwich Critique
Track Changes in Document
Big Picture
Characters
Dialogue
Pacing
Plot
About the WIP (Query)

When Peter, prince of Dantion, witnesses his father’s murder, he must go into hiding to escape the same fate. Things get even worse when his father’s killer steals the throne and starts to oppress the country’s people.

At the end of his rope, Peter seeks out The Veterans, a secret group aiding Dantion’s refugees from their home in Pine Quill Forest. He befriends a group of revolutionaries and begins to fall for Josef, a shy, handsome boy willing to fight by his side. Together, they form a rebellion and strike back against the new king. The rebellion gains the support of Dantion’s people but unknown to Peter, Josef hides a secret that might bring them all to their deaths.

First Page

Peter tried really hard. He tried to find work each morning, he tried to keep out of sight of Tallidon’s city guards, he tried not to make enemies and not to make friends, but most importantly, he tried to move on before anyone else could be seen with him. Being seen with Peter Kalyr, even unknowingly, could cost somebody their life. He was unwilling to let anyone pay that price and so this morning, like most mornings, he was knocking on doors.

The first house he tried never answered. He wasn’t sure if they weren’t home or were merely unwilling to speak with a stranger, but either way, he moved on. The next house turned him away without even opening the door. At the third house though, he was greeted with a gruff face and a mumbled “what do you want?”

“Good morning, sir,” Peter said. He put on his best smile and resisted the temptation to bow. No matter how hard he tried to forget that, the instinct never seemed to fade away. “I’m looking for work.”

The man in the doorway ran a hand across his face.

“Can you put new shoes on my horse? The ol’ mare’s been needing ‘em for a few days now and I haven’t had time to take her to get it properly done.”

Peter’s smile cracked and he widened it in an attempt to cover the falter. This was not going well. 

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